Concise Sentences

Is this okay, or is there a better way to word it?
“The conference will end at 5pm on Thursday, June 13th. To ensure that you are able to stay until the conference concludes, please book your departure flight leaving after 7pm.”
Leslie D. New Hartford, NY

Answer: You have done a good job of being clear and kind. A slight revision for conciseness (23 words vs. 30): The conference concludes at 5pm on Thursday, June 13th. Please book a flight leaving after 7pm so you can stay until the end.


The sentence is this: “If a nonconforming off-premise junkyard, sign or outside storage area is discontinued for at least 90 days, the use shall not be continued, repaired or reconstructed.”  My question is whether “off-premise” modifies “outdoor storage area”, which would mean that the outdoor storage would have to be located off the premises (or property).
C. Steven M., Esquire  Allentown, PA

Answer: To avoid a possible misinterpretation, change the order: “If a nonconforming sign, outside storage area, or off-premise junkyard is discontinued for at least 90 days, the use shall not be continued, repaired or reconstructed.”
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